reviewing the full version
I don't know why you submitted it to dance, it sounds a lot more ambient to me (at least in the start). Not as much as your others though. Wow this is long.
Okay... the pad in the start sounds really twisted and sick, but it's a good start. The other LFO thing you got there sounds spretty good too, makes a rising, digital feeling. I don't know about the high pitched squeaks though, they sound more scratchy than anything else. Do you have a bass there? In that case it's really low
It keeps the same very long. But then this fx thing's coming... it just seems like noise, it moves on to the part that contains some drums. This part is much better, it's catchy and dreamy. The reverse sine-like thing sounds fantastic.
A little repetitive at times, it seems to be the same one-bar repetation on the sine for a while. And so does many of the beats.
Then there is a break with some fx, which sounds great too, but it takes away a little of the style it had, and moves on to a harder part with all kinds of synth squeaks. I don't mind that part, it's okay I guess.
Now it comes back with underwater. I loved the square pad. Sounds professional as you add the little lfo and resonance.
And an industrial sounding sinking thing, sounds good, but I wish I could hear more of it later. Seems to be pretty random beats at times now, but they aren't noticable, you only hear rhytm and not drums at all... it keeps this way for reaaaaaaaaally long
Then you seem to end it. I like this part, a little more silent compared to the other track, but a great ending. I could like to see something else than the usual fade-out though.
So the summary should be
Awesome work!