You definitely have a melody that fits the theme, but it's a bit hard to get immersed in the imagery you're trying to create when 1. the trumpets sound like farts (hilariously so when it's clipping), 2. all the other instruments suck anyway and 3. the first melody reminds me a lot of a child song my mother used to sing during bedtime, about a frog who kept puffing his cheeks until he exploded to impress his lady friend.